WannaBeGeekGirl's Journal: Building Rictameters? anyone care to play along

I haven't seen anything in the site guidelines that doesn't allow threads like this one. Rictameter has more than one form, and for the purpose of this exercise, I'm using the second example found here at Writing.com.

I'm practicing Rictameter, and have seen some less lonely ways to do so.One involved a person posting a piece and the next reply would contain a Rictameter that began with the last word(s) of the former post.

If this is really lame, no problem. I won't get my feelings hurt. It is just more fun to work on these things with friends and strangers.

For the purpose of this thread, I'll take the definition of a rictameter as having 9 lines in the Rictameter modification format (see the above link):

2 syllables
4 syllables
6 syllables
8 syllables
10 syllables
8 syllables
6 syllables
4 syllables
2 syllables



reply along if you desire, please. I don't intend to make fun of any silly lines. The one I'm starting with isn't exactly earth-shattering!


Speechless

Again,
Time slips away.
Yet the boss walks my way.
Why me!? I'm always unprepared.
As if the top of my desk were too slick,
For the key tasks that need to stick.
Word from above-what now?
"You're promoted!"
Speechless.



(don't be shy, everyone starts somewhere...if you feel inclined, try one out starting with "Speechless")

Speechless (a start)...

[johndiii]

        Speechless...
        So, so quiet;
        No sound disturbs the dark
        silent longing for some far hope

Quixotic Exile

[Shadow Wrought]

Speechless.
Your pain's so deep,
Nightmare's escaped from sleep
Attacking your Soul's inner keep;
I can watch the struggle but am helpless.
I can't fight pasts I did not share
Vanguish your Demon's lair;
I can... but care.
Useless

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[Captain Splendid]

Whoa, nice. Love the last 2 lines.

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[WannaBeGeekGirl]

I enjoyed the whole thing!!! I have a long way to go with poetry and rictameter!

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[Shadow Wrought]

Thank you very much, I appreciate that. I think you have a very short way to go, but just as long way to go as anyone else. I have a friend who is a porfesisonal pilot, and whom I think of as being extremely wise (sometimes;-). While flying with him once he made the most beautiful landing I'd experienced. I complimented him on a "perfect" landing. After we stopped he told me that he did not believe in perfection. A "perfect" landing would need nothing to improve upon or get better at. So instead he j

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[WannaBeGeekGirl]

I agree with this. I have more experience in music than I do in writing. After a performance I always felt that regardless of how well (or poorly) I managed to express myself with the viola I should never get to the point that I felt I had mastered a piece. Even practicing a scale should be a continuous cycle of learning and honing the skills. When I am too good to need to practice scales, then I am foolish and need to be put in my place. (Fortunately, in the realm of music, there are many who are will

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[Shadow Wrought]

Thanks! I appreciate that.

Windmill's Rejoinder

[Shadow Wrought]

Useless?
You have your might!
And taking on your fight
Denies you strength, your Victor's right.
My duty's not saving you from duress,
But as your Demons you defy;
At the Dark with light fly,
Your bare soul I
Caress.

Movie Theater Moments

[WannaBeGeekGirl]

Movie Theater Moments

Caress.
Skin upon skin,
Wrap your digits through mine.
Feel my soft fingerprint embrace.
How butterflies dance; wings tickle inside.
A bright blush blossoms down my cheeks;
Careless giggles escape.
My heart skips on.
Romance.