buffer-overflowed's Journal: Why I shouldn't write dialog 8
I always loved writing, but I hate the way I write dialog, here's an example as to why, without formatting.
Are you content?
No, I am not.
Are you happy?
How can I be happy if I am not content.
Are you at peace?
How can I be at peace if I am not content.
Why is that?
There are pressing concerns, things I want changed, things that should be. Things that cause a rebellion in my consciousness.
And why would that be?
I still feel. Embarassment, shame, the need to argue, the whole tumultous rigamorole that is the human condition.
So it all comes back to angst, then?
Yes. And no.
And what does that come down to?
I seek more. I seek meaning.
And this goes back to a lack of Why are you not content?
The world does not conform to how I would like it to be.
But that is how things are.
That doesn't mean I should be happy and content with reality.
But that's how things are.
Things should change.
Many fear change.
Because they are foolish, change is how we measure time.
How profound.
Are you mocking me?
Yes.
Why?
It's futile to hold your own against how things are.
But many do.
And they are fools.
So the key is to accept things as they are, to never change, to be content, to never strive for better?
When all is as you want it to be, what is left to do?
Nothing.
So, what's the point of trying to change things, if the end result is the same? You are content with reality.
The journey is what matters.
The end is what matters, and the end is the same.
So I should stop caring then?
That is enlightenment, but not as you think it is.
How profound, For your next trick, will you explain that the meaning of life is 42?
... No
Critique at will. Be brutal.
the end (Score:1)
always sucks..
Yikes (Score:1)
It's fine when you're dicking around, but folks can't follow it. Remember, people talk and mean what they DON'T say. For example, read 'Heart of Darkness' by Conrad...it's written entirely in the third person. Basically, it's a story about a guy on a barge with two others telling a story. Thus sentences will begin:
" ' "What are you doing over there?", he heard Kurtz say.' " (rough example, but you get the general gist
Re:Yikes (Score:1)
Cool, I removed the context, but it was internal(sort of, mostly). I'm kinda glad you thought it sounded like that. Still not happy with it. And it's not recent, I stopped writing fiction(ok well no I didn't, judging by my slashdot posts, but you get the meaning there anyway) a long time ago and haven't been able to get back into it. I was always hyper-critical of my dialog(internal and conversations), and beginnings.
Hmmm (Score:2)
Tally ho, my fine, saucy young trollop. Your luck's in. Trip along here with all your cash and some naughty night attire, and you'll be staring at my bedroom ceiling from now till Christmas, you lucky tart. Yours with the deepest respect etc. Signed George. PS Woof, woof!
BLACKADDER
Ah, yes your highness...if I may change one small aspect?
PRINCE GEORGE
What?
BLACKADDER
The words?
Cheers,
Ethelred
Re:Hmmm (Score:2)
For all that is holy...they have the entire Blackadder series out on DVD. I wonder if I can get the SO to buy me that for my birthday? :-) And dost my eyes deceive me??? Red Dwarf is out on DVD too! Yeah I am behind the times....
Foreplay (Score:2)
Usually what happens is: they say something not quite right but we intuit what they mean and we ignore a lot of the fumbling.
There's often a lot of stopping and starting. Someone will being making a
Flirting (Score:2)
Tape-record some conversations (A lot of cell phones allow you to record phone calls... or you could actually get a little tape-recorder, so do it) and transcribe them.
And practice.
Transcribe movies/tv that have good dialog flow. Do the same with movies that have BAD dialo
Re:Flirting (Score:2)